Language Analysis
The language used in this conversation gives us a deep insight on Raina’s language acquisition. We get to see how her age and maturity is shown through her use of different words and tenses. We can see that Raina is in her telegraphic stage as she has a very wide vocabulary but does not have the ability to make complex sentences yet. We see this through her use of “mum i'm /gǝnǝ/ skip over to there (1) can we go in this field ↘.” We see that she had made a statement on what she was going to do then had contradicted herself after a pause and asked her mother if they could go into the field. This shows that she is at the end of her telegraphic stage as she was able to express both her wants and questions but we can also see that she did not know how to transfer between the two. We can also tell that she is in her telegraphic stage by the words that she uses to describe her mother and the events taking place around her. Raina refers to her mother as mum multiple times throughout the conversation which is usually seen by children who do not know how to pronounce the ‘o’ vowel sound correctly.
We can also see her lack of maturity from the multiple times where she had either paused or micropaused in the middle of a thought or idea. For example when she said “look (.) this way (.) i’m going to (.) going to (.) go over here” we can see that she had not fully known what she was saying when she had started talking by the multiple micropauses throughout the entire statement. These micropauses yet again prove that Raina is in her telegraphic stage as many children start off speaking with multiple pauses but eventually learn the language and learn to speak without any pauses. Children at this stage have multiple pauses in their speech because they have a limited vocabulary and don’t know how to describe what they are seeing, so they use the language that they already know to the best of their ability. Raina uses one simple adjective of ‘long’ and does not use any others to describe her surroundings which shows that she has not learned all the new adjectives to describe everything she is seeing.
In this text we also see the many different directive language that was used throughout the text to point out all of the different things that they had both experienced. Throughout the text we see multiple different directions signaled at the end of sentences by the use of ‘↘’ and ‘↗.’ These are used to indicate that the speaker is giving either an upward or downward intonation. These arrows followed verbal signals from the speakers such as ‘look,’ ‘where’ and ‘this.’ The use of this sense of direction also helps indicate the lack of maturity of Raina as we get to see that the mother is showing Raina all of these things for the first time so that she is able to learn and describe what all of these things are. This shows the mothers caretaker role of Raina that she is taking in order to teach her and help her. We also get to see her mother use very childish language in order for Raina to understand and comprehend what she is saying. For example Raina's mother says “look at that birdie (.) up in that tree (1) hear ↗ (1).” This shows her use of ‘birdie’ to try and communicate what is happening to Raina. We also see her mother pause after every statement in order to try and teach Raina the language in a slow paced way so that her immature mind can grasp the concepts that she is talking about.
AO1: There was a clear understanding of the text and a clear reference to its characteristic features, but I felt that they could have been broken down and expanded upon more. Also, I feel you could have discussed alternative features like contractions, turn-taking, and lexical fields. Another point, since you change ideas in the same paragraph, I would recommend splitting the paragraphs up. Score: 3
ReplyDeleteAO4: You did a good job at discussing the linguistic features. However, throughout your writing, you did not seem to mention any theories of language or any theorists. I would recommend adding this next time since it adds additional support. Score: 6
AO5: You used semi-long quotes. I recommend using shorter quotes and soloing out words like “blackbird” in order to talk about specific vocabulary. Score: 2
Score: 11/25
Hey Colby,
ReplyDeleteFor AO1 I’m going to give you a total of 3 marks. You had a basic understanding of the test, but I feel like you could’ve added a little more on your explanations. I feel like you also could’ve structured up your paragraphs a lot, as that will help the reader to reader better and understand which point you’re trying to make.
For AO4, I’m going to award you 7 marks total. To be awarded well in AO4, you would’ve needed to include theorists and theories, which you did not. This lowered your grade. I suggest you next time studying them and implying them into your text.
For AO5 you receive 2 marks. The reason why is because had a limited selection of quotes, meaning your quotes were too long. Pick one or two words, maybe three, to show your evidence make your point. I feel like if you used shorter quotes you would’ve done better.
Total: 12/25 Good work
Hi Colby,
ReplyDeleteFor your AO1, you received 3 marks for having a clear understanding of the text. However, these paragraphs could’ve been split as then it would’ve made it organized and flow more easier. Plus, you could expand on more points about the language like discussing the lexical fields and turn-taking technique.
For your AO4, you received 7 marks for having a clear understanding of linguistic issues, concepts, methods, and approaches. What would’ve made you score higher is if you mentioned any of the theories as you didn’t mention any of them here. I would recommend you to talk about one of them as it will add on to the analysis of language data.
For your AO5, you received 2 marks using some pretty long quotes for your analysis. You could’ve scored higher if you used small quotes that contained a few words rather than a whole sentence to then explain your point as it would’ve made the analysis more detailed.
12/25
AO1) I'm going to give you three marks. There is a clear understanding of the text. More elaboration and structure could help your response.
ReplyDeleteAO4) I'm going to give you 7 marks. Your understanding is clear of the concepts, issues, methods, and approaches.
AO5) I'm going to give you three marks. Quotations are too long, more elaboration rather than quote would work.
13/25
AO1: You had a very clear understanding of the text and clear references to characteristic features.
ReplyDeleteAO4: You had limited references to wider studies of linguistic issues. You also had minimal references to approaches taken by generally appropriate theorists. Your score would have been higher if you had mentioned some theorists in your analysis. You had a clear understanding of the linguistic concepts that you used in your analysis.
AO5: Your analysis was very clear and the examples that you used in your writing were clear as well.
Overall Score: 12/25 marks
Hi Colby,
ReplyDeleteAO1 - 3 marks - When writing your analysis, you shared a clear analysis of the text. You also provided a clear reference to characteristic features. You explained Raina well and determined her linguistic abilities, however you were a little off. For example, you identified her abilities under the telegraphic stage but seeing as she is 5 and can understand more complex sentences she’s in the post telegraphic stage.
AO4 - 9 marks - Your analysis shows a clear understanding of linguistic issues, concepts, methods, and approaches. Clear reference to wider study of linguistic issues and concepts. Clear reference to linguistic approaches taken. You analyzed the language of the text in depth and really elaborated on all of your points. The only thing wrong was your quotes got to be a little long. An example of this is when you were talking about micropauses. It isn’t a huge issue but it does need to be acknowledged.
AO5 - 3 marks - Clear selection, analysis, synthesis, of language data. Besides the long quotes and the mess up in the beginning, you explained all of your points well and shared a pretty good understanding of the text.
15/25
AO1:Hey colby, You had a clear understanding of the text. You also had clear references to the characteristic features
ReplyDeleteAO4:You had a limited understanding of the linguistic issues and limited references to the wider studies of linguistic issues. To improve here mention more information about child language acquisition.
AO5:You had a clear selection, analysis, and synthesis of language data.
12/25
AO1: 3 marks. You display a clear understanding of the text but to have reached a 4, your paragraphs could have been split up more. By splitting them up more, it would have flowed better. Also to make your writing stronger
ReplyDeleteAO4: 7 marks. You have a limited reference to the theories which could have strengthened your writing. But you have a clear understanding of the linguistic concepts that you used in your analysis but it could have used a bit more detail.
AO5 - 3 marks. You display a clear selection, analysis, synthesis, of language data. But the quotes you used as evidence were very lengthy and should be cut down in the future.